Here is another poem from Nigel's literacy group. This is a rhyming couplet poem about burgers.
Meat pattie juicy in a bun,
eating it up is a lot of fun,
Biting into it can be quite a mess,
cheese, bacon and tomato is the best,
Once I’m finished I don’t want more,
Because my tummy is kind of sore.
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ReplyDeletekia ora Room 5
ReplyDeleteMy name is Jakob R and I am in Room 4 at St Mary’s School in Gisborne.
I enjoyed how you said 10 9 8 7 6 5 4 3 2 blast off
Did you think about making it a bit longer?
Next time you could maybe put another rocket in?
When did you do it? How did you do it
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From Jakob R
Kia ora Tawhirimatea
ReplyDeleteI am Irelyn from saint marys school gisborne.
I like how you described the burger by like juicy, mess, but the best!
I agree.
where did you get the describing words from did you get them out of a dictionary or did you just use the words in your head that
rhyme.
ReplyDeleteKia ora Room 5
My name is Pinqi and I am in Room 4 at St Mary’s School in Gisborne.
I enjoyed that when you played tag.
You brought me back to watching Star Wars
Maybe you could add more details or Characters
Did you try to add more planets images on it?
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From Pinqi
hello. my name is Isabella from St Mary's School. I like how you added the describing words. have you tried others? do you visit the shop every day?
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Kia ora,
ReplyDeleteMy name is Rylee from St Mary's School.
I enjoyed your poem and I like the part when you said once i'm finished i don't what more because my tummy is kind of sore.
from Rylee
Kia Ora My Name is Jakob A from Saint Mary's School.
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed your poem about the burgers.
I like your riming that you put in your poem.
It reminds me of when I read poems in my old class.
Kia ora Tawhirimatea
ReplyDeleteI am thomas from saint marys school Gisborne.
I like how you described the burger as juicy mess but the best.
Did you search up the disrobing words or did you get them from your head.
from Thomas.
Hi Rawhiti School! I really like the poem you have wrote! I really like you talking about burgers! I also like burgers! I don't like the vegetables in the burgers even though they are healthy for you. This part gave me a memory of when I ate 2 burgers and I got so full that I couldn't even walk properly! To improve, you could add some detail about why you like burgers and what your favourite part is in the burger. Why do you like burgers? I will see you next time! Goodbye!
ReplyDelete- Nishka
Hi Tawhirimatea! Wow you knocked my socks off the poem is amazing your rhymes are hilarious and I liked how you said funny things and described your burger at the same time. You brought me back when I went to Mcdonalds and bought a Big Mac. Great work but if you could add more information about your poem like did you do it by yourself? Did this take along time? From Sahil:)
ReplyDeleteKia Ora Tawhirimatea!
ReplyDeleteI am Paige B from Yaldhurst School.
I liked the way you said what the burger taste and looks like!
You brought me back to when I have my very first burger it was so yum and juicy and messy! Next time you can put in what you think the best part is!
How do you make this and how much of your class likes it?
Kind regards Paige B.